Talk:Volume 1

A nice little talk page to make, eh? Sure. I'll do it. I'm more used to other wikis having a comment section at the bottom though.

Chapter 1
I must say, the first issue is quite spectacular. Besides the typoes, I really felt the intensity of Anna on one of her first outings in a long time. The explosion definitely was a good way to make her feel responsible, and I do hope that remains something on her mind as the story progresses.

As for Nicole, she's a lawyer isn't she? I feel like some of the ideas I had in Emerald are experienced here, except this definitely takes a darker route automatically. Plus Anna's idea of doing this religiously is very interesting. Definitely contrasts with my character Emerald, who basically fights bad guys since she feels obligated by the necklace (the source of her power) saved her life.

Thomas is creepy. Very creepy. When you mentioned his past marraiges, I snickered.

Can't wait to see more of this.

--Not Jack Kirby I draw so much for you guys.

Glad you enjoyed it :D Yeah I'll need to go through again and fix the typos again.

Nicole is actually a journalist. Guess I didn't make that clear in this chapter but I think it's there in the second.

Danke. --The Invasion Has Begun

Chapter 2
Oh, I like this mystery that's developing around the lightning-powered villain. Especially since it's a murderer. Looks like Nicole and Anna are getting pretty heated there, too. Wouldn't be surprised to see Nicole eventually backstab Anna.

BTW, here's a liturature rule: if, in a conversation, someone else is speaking, it must become a new paragraph.

Say, someone writes it like this: That's wrong. It should be seperated into two paragraphs. Get what I mean here?
 * "Hi," Bob said. "Hello," Steve replied.
 * "Hi," Bob said with an enthustiastic smile.
 * "Hello," Steve replied sullenly.

--Not Jack Kirby I draw so much for you guys.  06:59, October 13, 2016 (UTC)

Yeah.

Must've been a mistake because I normally do that XD I'll have to look out for that in the other chapters.

The Invasion Has Begun 12:27, October 13, 2016 (UTC)